It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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is always important for

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society. In recent days,

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improvement has declined due to various factors like social media, spending time with peers and participating in

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cultural activities. but some claim family plays a primary role

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teaches socialism as well as good habits which enhance their

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of all, children developments are distracted due to the high usage of social media and

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with colleagues. They tend to spend a lot of time on social media , watching movies and get addicted to it.

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, my cousin used to watch a comic series on TV and his behaviour changed like the cartoon hero in web series.

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, there could be serious character changes might reflect when they mix up with unwanted friendships.

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will affect their

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and bad reputation in their career.

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, family are

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children

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development

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childhood, family members teach a child to

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socialised with other

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which

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child improvement.

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parents

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trained us how to behave in society which made us

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responsible

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to

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community.

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, family members educate

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young

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by narrating good stories which stimulate their growth. To conclude, young

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people

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are spoiling their life due to the reasons mentioned

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here but still parents

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responsibility for their improvement to become good

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