Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Animals
or any other beings on Earth
is
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a precious gift from God, they have been placed on Earth
since
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millions of years ago and now some of them have extinct. Humans have the
responsibilities
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to protect them and
also
rescue
endanger
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species. But
in
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these days, some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild
animals
because we humans have no need for them. For me, I completely disagree with
this
point of view. First of all, I think it is completely ridiculous to deny the importance of
any
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animals
. Every life is matter and we all have to appreciate them. Of Course that humans need meats from certain
animals
to survive but that does not mean that we
are allow
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to destroy them or their habitats to accommodate the world’s population. There
are
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enough
place
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for
eveyone
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everyone
so we
dont
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don't
have to cause
an
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destruction for any entertainment needs. I
also
disagree with the idea that protecting
animals
is a waste of resources,
protect
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animals
is
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also
mean that we are protecting
thier
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their
life and home which is ours too.
The nature
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is
thier
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their
habitats
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habitat
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, they produce oxygen and
absord
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absorb
cacbon
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carbon
dioxide in order to
stabilies
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stabilise
stabilize
stabilises
the Earth’s climate.If we
dont
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don't
stop
destroy
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them, the doom days
is
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inevitable, Earth will become a
death
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planet.
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doing small things like stop littering or dumping waste
to
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nature...etc, you are
minimzing
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minimising
all the damage that can cause the
world’collapse
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world collapse
world collapsed
. In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild
animals
should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them no matter what.
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