Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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present, many
people
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prefer establishing their own
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to working for a company or organisation. There are some reasons why
people
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choose to be self-employed.
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, there are some drawbacks
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establishing own
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choose to be self-employed because of the low salary, taking a long time to upgrade their positions and there are constraints
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their skills and thoughts.
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, the normal salary for ordinary employees is under 200,000 kyats in Myanmar. And
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finance is insufficient for their accommodation.
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, it will take a long time to upgrade their positions if they worked in a company.
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they are hard-working, there are some companies which specify the period of upgrading position. After that, they are not allowed to present their opinions openly and their skills are restricted. ​
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, there are some drawbacks
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being self-employed.
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, they do not have the background so
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they are essential to struggle
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to penetrate the
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area.
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, they are the ones who
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for everything. When they do their own job, they will need to manage in details
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as the investment, the income as well as the
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. If their own job is not strong enough to penetrate the
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area, their investments will be lost. And
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, their lives will be broken because of their loss. ​In conclusion, there are some reasons why
people
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choose to establish
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their own
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job rather than
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work for the company. And
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, there are
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some negative impacts on their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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