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Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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there is little room for doubt that technological progress is
one
 of the fastest-growing industries in the world.
However
, its impact
in
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environment
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the environment
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 remains a source of constant debate.
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effect
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 of
this
 advancement circumference perspective and argue in
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favour
favoar
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favour
 negative
one
. On the
one
 hand, providing
economic
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 incentive for
surounding
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surrounding
persevation
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preservation
perseveration
 is
unguably
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unarguably
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on
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one
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 of the main contributions
of
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development
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 of
technology
. For
exple
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example
, if
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an advertisement
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advertisement
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 for collecting cash ads to protect species didn't
existence
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 the animals would
are
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 the result of the
technology
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technological
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 progress.
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One
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 the negative side,
technology
 develops often at the expense of part of
natures
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. By way of an illustration for
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establishing
esstablishing
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establishing
 power plants,
a
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vast amounts of trees have been cut. Indeed, so
much
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 of them are
polutting
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polluting
putting
 air.
Furthermore
, increasing in
transportations
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transportation
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are
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brouth
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brought
 about
avolving
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evolving
technology
 that exactly
lead
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 to both air pollution and destruction of the
environment
. In my opinion,
at
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ancient
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the ancient
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time
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 we had pristine nature, in as much as, there was no
technology
 its consequences. what
have
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 been discussed,
technology
 has little, if any,
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positive
possitive
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positive
 influence on the
environment
. In the light of
these fact
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, the advancement of
technology
 without all its aids
,
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 has a consequence for
environment
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the environment
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.
Thus
, provided during
this
 progress if
environment
 to be ignored, nature will be
disapears
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disappears
definitly
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definitely
.
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