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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawback

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Nowadays, an individual prefers to
study
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 abroad for their tertiary level rather than in their homeland.
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However
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 it is not a huge issue that needs to be widened as studying oversea has a plethora of merits that people do not aware
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 On the one hand, some might say that education abroad is prohibitive compared to local education.
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, society needs to change
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 kind of low-class mentality as everything come with its price, to be exact, nothing is free in order for one to succeed.
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students
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 who
study
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 at the top oversea universities probably have a higher employability rate than those who
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 locally. That indicates all the penny they expense is worth for them as it is for a long-term plan.
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, oversea
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 can discover a new part of the world that they do not have ever seen prior. It is a once-in-the-life experience that everyone should grab as it can broaden people's perspectives.
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, an individual who just studies locally will not able to feel what abroad
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 feel because they live in two whole distinct places.
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, abroad
students
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 may travel around the country where they live and it can be a stress-free coping mechanism. In conclusion, it is crystal clear indicating that the merits of who
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 abroad outweigh the demerits,
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, it is not mean that studying locally is a bad choice. I think if the
students
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 have the opportunity to pursue
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either undergraduate or postgraduate level, they should grab it without
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