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Some people think that universities should provide knowledge and skills related to a future career. Others think the true function of university is to give access to knowledge for its own sake. What is your opinion of the main function of university?

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Actually, more and more people discuss the true function of the
university
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. According to my four years
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university
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life
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 and more than 10 years of
work
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 experience, I should say that
functions
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the functions
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 of the
university
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 should not only contain imparting knowledge and
skills
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 for the future,
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also
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but also
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 include fostering the
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students
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student's
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 abilities to be independent,
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, to get access to knowledge for its own sake. You can see that nearly most of the
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 universities draw attention to the theoretical curriculum. Yes, these courses are of great importance for
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students
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, which help them form a basic impression of the specific subject. For
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further
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 study,
this
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 is the foundation of getting the ticket
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for
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a Master
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Master
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 or
Ph.D
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. In the meantime, teachers often guide and inspire the independence to get knowledge out of course.
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, a suitable skill for the job after graduation is very useful for the
students
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 who will not attend
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 studies. Those
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 in the
university
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 will spend more time
on
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adapting to
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work
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life
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 than that in
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college
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, in fact, due to the difference between theory and practice. The survey suggests that more than 90% of
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students
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 have been given the offer of a job even when they are still studying
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last
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 year of
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. And the percentage of those in
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 reduces apace.
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students
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 always show many more connection abilities
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 their
work
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life
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. But is it the whole thing? Absolutely no! There is a key problem that
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students
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 just know the
skills
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 for
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. They are just workers. Promotion of the
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work
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life
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 always
need
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 some important
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,
such
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 as management, computer
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, etc.
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students
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 usually do not obtain these, which are imparted in
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. Practically, living a better
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 consists of many aspects of your study.
Work
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skills
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 are essential for
life
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, and many theoretical
curriculum
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 including as many as possible subjects are still important for long-term
work
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 and
life
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. So, will it be better to add some theoretical lessons in
college
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 and some social practice courses in
university
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 as appropriate?

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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