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Some people think that universities should provide knowledge and skills related to a future career. Others think the true function of university is to give access to knowledge for its own sake. What is your opinion of the main function of university?

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Actually, more and more people discuss the true function of the
university
. According to my four years
university
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life
 and more than 10 years of
work
 experience, I should say that
functions
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 of the
university
 should not only contain imparting knowledge and
skills
 for the future,
also
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 include fostering the
students
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student's
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 abilities to be independent,
thus
, to get access to knowledge for its own sake. You can see that nearly most of the
worlds’
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 universities draw attention to the theoretical curriculum. Yes, these courses are of great importance for
university
students
, which help them form a basic impression of the specific subject. For
a
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further
 study,
this
 is the foundation of getting the ticket
of
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a Master
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Master
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Master's
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 or
Ph.D
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. In the meantime, teachers often guide and inspire the independence to get knowledge out of course.
However
, a suitable skill for the job after graduation is very useful for the
students
 who will not attend
further
 studies. Those
students
 in the
university
 will spend more time
on
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adapting to
the
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work
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work-life
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life
 than that in
the
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college
, in fact, due to the difference between theory and practice. The survey suggests that more than 90% of
college
students
 have been given the offer of a job even when they are still studying
at
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 the
last
 year of
schoolyard
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. And the percentage of those in
university
 reduces apace.
College
students
 always show many more connection abilities
of
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 their
work
life
. But is it the whole thing? Absolutely no! There is a key problem that
college
students
 just know the
skills
 for
work
. They are just workers. Promotion of the
work
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work-life
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life
 always
need
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 some important
skills
,
such
 as management, computer
skills
, etc.
College
students
 usually do not obtain these, which are imparted in
university
. Practically, living a better
life
 consists of many aspects of your study.
Work
skills
 are essential for
life
, and many theoretical
curriculum
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 including as many as possible subjects are still important for long-term
work
 and
life
. So, will it be better to add some theoretical lessons in
college
 and some social practice courses in
university
 as appropriate?
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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