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Many people use distance-learning programs(study material post, TV, Internet, etc.) to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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distance-learning
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 program or attend college or university differs
from
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situations
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situation
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.
Firstly
, if you are an international student who would like to attend universities overseas and just to obtain a degree, and it is not convenient to travel abroad,
such
 as due to covid-19,
distance-learning
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distance learning
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 is a very suitable method to achieve
this
.
Distance-learning
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 usually provides different study times, which is called part-time
course
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courses
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. So even if you are still working, you can
also
 choose time to study online. Apparently, the cost of
distance-learning
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 will be much lower
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that
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than
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 attending
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face-to-face
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face-to face
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 because you will probably spend some more money on the rental and local food, which are often expensive. Many people cannot afford it.
Nevertheless
,
distance-learning
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distance learning
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 does not contain some advantages which face-to-face education can provide.
Face-to-face
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The face-to-face
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 method makes it possible for students to participate in curriculums and communicate with classmates directly. Attending school personally will give the students not only knowledge but
also
 entertainment and some extra contents
which
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distance-learning
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distance learning
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 cannot provide.
In other words
, attending college or university is not just studying itself.
Distance-learning
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 mostly relies on the quality of
Internet
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the Internet
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, which sometimes is poor. If the Internet is shut down,
then
 the course will be interrupted and need time to
recovery
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. And there are lots of distractions when students are in
distance-learning
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distance learning
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,
such
 as TV, delicious food, running children, etc. around them, which sometimes discounts the quality of a class. So everything has its advantages and disadvantages. How to choose and
to
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 do depends on your demands, cost, purpose, and the situations around you.
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