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More and more people think there is no need for printed paper newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #paper #newspapers
To date, Some people suggest that
this
 period is safe and more convenient to live in, while others have counter-arguments that it would be better to live in our periodical days.
This
 essay will discuss both views with suitable examples.
To begin
 with, We are living in a fast-paced world which belongs to technology. Nowadays,Humans concentrate on improving automation more than manpower.But we need to focus on natural process because it has fewer side effects.
Consequently
, we can prevent over domination of artificial intelligence. If we take a look back on history the world had more wealth than now. Day-by-day people are slowly forgetting about the importance of mother nature. Precisely, our ancestors lived a peaceful life without any stress. But we are rushing up on technology and forgetting about a safe and sound life.In history, they were physically active. So that, It helped them to live healthy without any disease and depression. But today we are living an unhealthy lifestyle with lots of tension and anxiety. Significantly, the growth of automation is making humans lazy. So it will lead them into a risky future.
For example
,our predecessors did Farming with complete manpower which is very organic and eco-friendly. In spite of that,we are farming by use of machinery which produces inorganic and adultery edibles. From my point of view, Antiquity is far better than the contemporary period, It will be very interesting to live happily in that safe zone. In future,automation indeed will dominate the human part of
this
 world. While It is the perfect time to get awareness and start to bring back our root which was carried by our forefathers.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • printed paper newspapers
  • digital news platforms
  • tangible reading experience
  • replicated
  • disconnect from technology
  • focused
  • immersive
  • accessible
  • elderly
  • archival source
  • preserving historical events
  • local news coverage
  • advertising opportunities
  • small businesses
  • convenience
  • instant updates
  • valued
  • completely replaced
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