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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is constantly argued whether the curriculums of the schooling system provide enough practical experience to their students to bag job opportunities when they step into the industry. I agree with the statement, following paragraphs will analyze two factors which contribute to the affirmation, as well as to my opinion. One of the strong factors that keep me agreeing with the title is the difficulty of applying the same theories in real-world incidents.
For instance
, being a telecommunication professional for the
last
 several years, I know how it is difficult to solve problems with the theoretical knowledge that we learned during our schooling times. Sometimes, it is the industry itself that taught us to solve
such
 things.
That is
 because of the inability of our education system, which produces just academics ,not skilful academics.
Secondly
, in some industries, it is really hard to find an opportunity that suits the paper qualification.
For example
, an article which was published recently in the Sunday Observer of Sri Lanka has pointed out several reasons why there is a shortage of workforce in some fields. As per the author, the current job market is facing a huge problem in finding ideal candidates for some vacancies. Most employers have pointed out, that universities and other institutions have not addressed the develop skills in students,
instead
 of doing that they are only focusing to fill notes within their years of schooling.
Therefore
 not only in Sri Lanka but
also
 in most developing countries governments find it difficult to gather their young generation in the direction of the country's development. To encapsulate my writing, I reiterate colleges and other educational institutions must focus on changing their materials to enhance skills in a student while providing enriching tutorials to upgrade their knowledge.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education system
  • curriculum
  • factual knowledge
  • practical skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem solving
  • academic achievement
  • real-world application
  • balance
  • integration
  • learning outcomes
  • employment opportunities
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