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In many countries, crime rate is increasing. What do you think are the main cause of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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Nowadays, illegal activities have been increasing day by day in a lot of countries owing to numerous reasons. Many research shows that citizens who are living in countries which have a high crime ratio have diminished their life quality.
This
 essay will examine what are the main reasons for
this
 issue and how power can deal with it.
First
 of all, folk who are related to criminal activities are not punished by their politics efficiently. Many nations assume that even if they committed crimes, they would not judge by the severe laws.
On the other hand
, these authorities do not implement different laws and nations that trust the legal gap have been still committing a crime.
For instance
, one character who murdered the female and did not get effective punishment set an example for many communities who tend to crimes that have been supported by the justice system.
Secondly
, reasons combined with economic conditions cause a lot of criminal activities. One character who has no stable income has lost hope and faith in their future. Because of these feelings,
this
 human can commit a crime freely.
For example
, if one individual faced starvation, stealing food from the bakery or market would be given a chance to stay life. In
this
 case, many populations blame
this
 somebody, whereas
instead
 of accusing the shoplifter, the community should demand the government strengthen the country's social policies.
As a result
 , living in welfare and peace is a human right for every citizen. A lot of authorities avoid their responsibilities. If we think that we deserve a safe life, we will demand these circumstances from our state.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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