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Full-time university students spend a lot of time studying.Some say they should be involved in other activities as well. What extent do yoy agree or disagree!

#university #students #time #say #activities #yoy
Spending more
time
 for college pupils in studying,
however
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 several people suggest that they
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should
also
 participate in campus activity, I'm in the point that totally
agree
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agrees
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 with the
statemets
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statements
statement
. The paragraph below
are
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 the reasons why I agree with the statements. Being a full-
time
students
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student
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 in college should give more
time
in
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to
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 studying to learn more for the reasons that they have enough
time
 to
dscover
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discover
 more ideas in school in which the professor can explain the topic on deep
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explanation
.
For
instance
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 in every
subject
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 the professor
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will
wil
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will
 spend 1 hour, so
this
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enough
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enough
time
 to comprehend
of
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the learner on their topic.
As a result
, the pupils will be more
competent
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competitive
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 because they
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received
recieved
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receive
 enough information that they need.
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Further
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Furthermore
more
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apply
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, engaging
school
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in school
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 activity is
also
 the best way to enhance the talents and skills of
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the individual
an individual
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individual
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individuals
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. Because in that way their capability is discovered by joining the contest like singing, dancing or essay
compitations
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competitions
 in the
feild
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field
. In
this
process
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 the learner will develop to become
self confident
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self-confident
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 and more interested
on
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in
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 what talents
that
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they excel
.
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in.
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 In conclusion, spending more
time
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studying
studing
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studying
 is the best way to enhance everyone,s idea
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and
ans
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and
envolving
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involving
 school activity lead to
become
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becoming
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 more
confient
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confident
 and competent,
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