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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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In our modern society, the
environment
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 is always a hotly- debated topic.
This
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 is the fact that human beings are damaging the
environment
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 seriously in various aspects.
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 both governments should offer laws to protect it and
the
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individuals
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 need to know their responsibilities for saving the
environment
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. Obviously, human beings are ruining the natural habitats seriously in a variety of ways.
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, the air is affected dramatically by the ever-increasing of citizens and their private transportation. Since
the
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vehicles
is
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 leading to air pollution
such
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 as
:
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 the
omnipresent
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 of private cars and motorbike, especially
metropolis
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in metropolis
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such
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 as Ha Noi and Ho Chi Minh city.
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, All these things can demolish
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer and cause the greenhouse effect seriously.
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, the factory is more established and the amount of waste
were
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 eliminated into rivers, lakes, etc. Not only does the manufactory make an impact but the
people
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 are
also
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 a part of direct bringing out
a non-biodegradable ingredients
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non-biodegradable ingredients
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 or slow decomposition.
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, It
create
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 serious negative ramification
to
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for
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 water that results in disease
of
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people
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 and
die
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death
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 of organism sea.
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, the exploitation
minerals
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of minerals
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 , deforestation or animal hunting, etc,
also
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 cause floods, change clime and make serious effects
to
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on
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soil
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the soil
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environment
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.
Therefore
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, one immediate practical solution is
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belong
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 to the government that gives out strongly measure and law for treatment, warm for the
people
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 who have behaviours
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opposed
itoppose
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oppose
.
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, the government can launch, propaganda, invite,
canvass
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and canvass
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to
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everyone about
protect
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protecting
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environment
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the environment
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.
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, in the school always organize for students have one-day cleaning labour surround school or organize activities exam draw or write about protect
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environment
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the environment
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 and students had
responsible
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responded
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 to project
environment
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 “green-clean-beautiful”.
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Moreover
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Moreover
,
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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 should plant and use
pulic
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public
 vehicles and just know how to classify garbage,
tackle
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and tackle
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correctly
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it correctly
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 to improve the
environment
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. In conclusion, the
environment
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 life is very important so it needs to be protected to the
people
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 and every have life strongly develop.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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