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Most people say that in order for one to be fluent in a language, they must live and work for sometime in that Country. Do you agree/disagree?

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In
this
 modern world, It is quite important to know different languages. Some believe that in order to be fluent in a certain
language
, they should resident in that
country
 and work for some time.
however
, In my perspective, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement and the reasons for
this
 will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are advantages of moving to a
country
 in order to learn their native
language
.
For instance
, one of the researches done at Clifford University
,
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 discovered that speaking to different people is the best way to be fluent in a
language
 rather than attending
language
 classes.
Secondly
, It helps you to identify the commonly used word on day to day basis which is one of the key tactics to learning a particular
language
 much faster.
Finally
, it helps you to avoid unnecessary pressure.
For example
,
although
 at the start it puts you a lot of pressure living in another
country
 and trying to learn their
language
, later ,on it eases out the unnecessary pressure.
On the other hand
,
although
 it has a certain level of advantages, it is not a must! If you managed to find a good class locally, you can easily learn the
language
 you are interested in.
In addition
, the internet managed to bridge the gap between countries in a significant way, and because of that people can easily register for online classes or watch videos to familiarise themselves with a
language
.
Furthermore
, you could join community groups or clubs that speak the
language
 you want to be fluent in. In conclusion,
this
 essay has discussed both pros and cons of learning a particular
language
 by moving to a
country
 where people speak the same.
However
, I strongly disagree that it is a must that someone should move because there are plenty of ways to be fluent in a
language
 by staying in your own
country
.
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