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Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives?

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As time passes, every
parent
-
child
 dynamic changes as the
child
learn
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 to think more independently.
This
 essay will discuss why I think every
parent
 should still be present in their
child
's life as a friend and even as a mentor.
Firstly
, a
parent
 should be their
child
's friend. As the love of
parent
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 is
one
 of the purest forms of love, having them being their kid's friend and confidant has a lot of advantages. A
parent
 will only think of their offspring's own good and will do their best to keep them
unharm
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unharmed
.
For instance
, when
one
want
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 something from someone,
one
 can always rely on the friendship
one
's have with parents.
This
 kind of relationship is hard to find and
are
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is
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 best to have.
Also
, a
parent
 can always be
one
's advisor. They can be the
one
 their
child
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 to
everytime
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 they need some advice. As parents have had
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of experience,
one
 can trust they have the right answers
one
 is looking for. As mentioned, they always will think of their
child
first
, so it is safe to say that the advice they will provide will only benefit their
child
.
For example
, when their
child
 wants to buy a house, they know based
from
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 experience, what they should look for, and they
also
 know what their
child
 wants and needs, which will eventually give them a lot of information to work on to give
a mindful advice
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mindful advice
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. In summary, because parents will never fail to support and wish the best for their offspring, it is good
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 idea to flourish and cherish whatever relationship they have.
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