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Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives?

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As time passes, every
parent
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child
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 dynamic changes as the
child
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learn
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 to think more independently.
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 essay will discuss why I think every
parent
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 should still be present in their
child
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's life as a friend and even as a mentor.
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, a
parent
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 should be their
child
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's friend. As the love of
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parent
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 is
one
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 of the purest forms of love, having them being their kid's friend and confidant has a lot of advantages. A
parent
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 will only think of their offspring's own good and will do their best to keep them
unharm
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unharmed
.
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want
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 something from someone,
one
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 can always rely on the friendship
one
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's have with parents.
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 kind of relationship is hard to find and
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 best to have.
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, a
parent
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 can always be
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's advisor. They can be the
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 their
child
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go
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 to
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 they need some advice. As parents have had
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of experience,
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 can trust they have the right answers
one
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 is looking for. As mentioned, they always will think of their
child
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first
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, so it is safe to say that the advice they will provide will only benefit their
child
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.
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, when their
child
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 wants to buy a house, they know based
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 experience, what they should look for, and they
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 know what their
child
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 wants and needs, which will eventually give them a lot of information to work on to give
a mindful advice
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mindful advice
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. In summary, because parents will never fail to support and wish the best for their offspring, it is good
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 idea to flourish and cherish whatever relationship they have.
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