Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some individuals are of the opinion that pupils should take a

gap

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year

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between high school and university, to explore and improve

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themselves

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. There are many good sides to

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idea but I believe that

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opinion

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has a bad side. There is no doubt that having a

gap

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year

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between college and high school will help

one

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expand herself and hone her skills through different experiences.

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, when

traveling

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to another country, due to the adventure of finding a way or a place to stay,

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communicating to buy food will help

one

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learn to adapt to different cultures and situations, develop communication skills,and sometimes it is possible to pick up new foreign languages.

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this

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break is

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a time for an individual to look into her inner soul in order to find out what she really needs and prefers, or what her strengths and weaknesses are, based on it will identify a suitable career path for those who are still confused about their future. From the two points

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apply

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already mentioned above, it is

clearly

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to admit that if the

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year

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is not happening, the individual might not know what she truly wanted and

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wrong major which lead

she

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her

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to a bad result

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as: she will struggle with her studies and waste a colossal amount of money on tuition fees, on the major that she

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love

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. Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I

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believe that

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gap

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a gap

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year

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such

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a critical period will produce adverse effects on individuals.

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of all, when

one

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has

the

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gap

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year

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, your peers

already

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study

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studying

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going

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to work and are

one

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step closer to success.

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will create an implicit comparison deep inside that makes individuals lose

her

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confidence and momentum to study.

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, when you go back to school after a long time being absent, people will have a hard time resuming their education. In the worst scenario, some students will drop out because they can not follow the lesson and atmosphere of the college anymore, and go back to doing

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one’s

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dreams without a degree.

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, there is a case that if the

gap

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year

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involves international travel and living abroad,

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year

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-old gapper without any experience in planning and budgeting might be at risk of running out of money,

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and being

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tricked into doing something illegal for money.

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, a

gap

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year

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to go to another country might be extortionately expensive, because

one

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will have to take into consideration a host of expenses including transportation, accommodation, and food. In conclusion, a break between

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high school

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highschool

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high school

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and college to go to work or experience travelling abroad

have

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both advantages and disadvantages.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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