Some people say that young people are much more influenced by their friends than their parents or teachers. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals in today's modern times allude that youth buddies have a stronger influence on them compared to their immediate family or educators. Personally, I do not support

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of thought.

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I agree that whom a person hangs out with, may

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impact their behaviour, I don't think the extent would be significantly greater than that exerted from where a person lives. My essay below will explain why I do not subscribe to

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thought process.

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, with today's busy world and the run around for money, comfort, recognition and just generally the thought process of acquiring more and more, It seems easier to attribute the negative behaviour of children to external influences outside the control of the home or

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. I believe

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is a way of justifying the progressively worse behaviour of youngsters as beyond the control of their guardians, who should implement discipline and guidance. It is a way of passing the buck to someone else, in

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case; friends. Those in a position of responsibility should rather look at their own discipline skills which I believe have become diluted over the years for a plethora of reasons

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as; letting children make their own decisions and granting too much independence at a younger age compared to

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a decade ago.

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, the vast majority of time spent with hang-out buddies is quite small compared to the time spent combined at home with loved ones and in a learning environment

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a university. These hours when added together are significantly more considering the fact that the

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year ideally starts from about age four to the twenties. Based on

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, I find it hard to fathom what is left ; homework, extracurricular activities and socializing with other likeable humans. Within

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period, socializing would have

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a great influence ,especially considering the fact that

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a ward dedicates less time to these friendships compared to the two other factors; home and

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. In conclusion, I would reiterate that friends do not have greater control over the behaviours of individuals

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to immediate relatives and teachers. There are other factors at play that should be considered .

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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