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It is a good thing if senior management workers in a company get a much high salery than other workers in tha same company. Do you agree or disagree?

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Paying
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salary
sales
salery
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salary
 from a
company
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 to workers by their positions can remember them
to
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 their value
for
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company
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the company
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. Some argued that
campany
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company
 should provide high salaries to their high employees than normal employees. I believe that giving
wage
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 to
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worker
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 according to their rank in a
company
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 is entirely justified, but we should be careful that it cannot create any contraposition.  For a
company
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, offering payment to
employer
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employers
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 consequent to their ability can encourage
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the employer
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employer
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employers
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 to work better. A
company
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 should give more money to their special talent than less valuable labourer which
motivate
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 them to work with more energy
as a result
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company
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 will
developed
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 their condition
in
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financially and structurally.
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, a
company
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 used to pay more
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salary
salery
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salary
 to their Manager than their Guard because a manager
have
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 more responsibility than
guard
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, he/she
maintain
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 the whole organisation. If
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company
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 face any detriment to their whole condition, a
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manager
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manger
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have
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 to answer for
this
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.
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, a
company
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 should provide high
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 to their highly valuable
worker
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.
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, giving
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salery
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salary
 to
labourer
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labourers
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 to their position can create a dissimilarity among them.
Senior
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officer
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officers
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 who get big
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salery
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salary
 than
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ordinary
ordinay
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ordinary
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worker
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 can bring arrogance
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 their mind resulting in they can behave badly
to
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toward
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the less
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less paid
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worker
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workers
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 which can destroy a
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companies
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 social bonding and community degeneration.
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, we often see in large
companies
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 that
a boos
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 when talking with their
companies
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 normal staff
such
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 as Tea boy or a
worker
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 who maintain
comapnies
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companies
 cleaning, he always shout with them like they have no effort to
this
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company
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 which can lead to
bring
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companies
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 and social inequalities. So, a
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salery
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salary
 difference can take
varience
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variance
 on campaniles situation and social life. In conclusion, it is needed for
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company
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the company
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 to pay high
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salery
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salary
 to their main important recruiters. I think that paying more
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 to senior management employers than less
valauable
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valuable
 employers is a good
things
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 for
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company
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, but
i
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also
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 think that it can create dissimilarity
into
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 them. So, a
company
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 should have to
be carefully handle
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 it.
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