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Some people believe that international news should be included in the syllabus of secondary school students. Do you agree or disagree?

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News
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The news
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give
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gives
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 us more
information
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 about society and the universe.
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 certain
claim
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, the
news
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 about the world must be added in the higher education curriculum
and
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, and
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 it helps the student to get
information
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 about universal events, and trending technologies and improves general knowledge skills. The adult should know about the
information
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, what is happening in the world? and addition of international
news
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 in the
syllabus
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 provides flexibility for the
students
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 to gain
information
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 about the world.
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, when I was doing my higher education, my staff forced me to read the international
news
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which
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 helped me to crack the Indian Administrative
service
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 exam.
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,
students
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 know about the economic
news
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 which provides
a
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apply
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statistical
information
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 about other countries.
Students
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 must know the global
news
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 from the level of school education to gain access to the global
news
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. Technologies are growing tremendously. The international
news
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 provides all the insight into technology enhancement. By adding the
news
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 to the
syllabus
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,
students
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 become highly qualified and intelligent after graduation.
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, my cousin studied at Delhi Public School
and
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 international
news
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 was a major extra-curricular activity.
This
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 improved his knowledge about the trending technologies and helped him to enrol in the Institute of
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 and Technology.
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, international
news
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 improves the general knowledge skills of the
students
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. There are
various
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more
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 puzzles and quiz questions available in the international
news
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 than in the local
news
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 edition.
News
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appending
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 to the
syllabus
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help
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helps
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 to improve problem-solving capability.
To conclude
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, the
news
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 is a must for everyone.
However
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,
Students
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 will gain more benefits by adding it to the
syllabus
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task response
State a clear view on whether you agree or not. Your answer should say yes or no about including international news in secondary school. Then give 2–3 reasons and one example that is from school level.
coherence and cohesion
Make a simple plan. Use an intro that shows your view, then 2 body parts with one main idea each, and a short conclusion. Use linking words like first, next, also, but, however.
idea
There are ideas to show how news can help knowledge and tech.
development
Examples are used to support points.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global perspective
  • current affairs
  • critical thinking skills
  • cultural awareness
  • empathy
  • language skills
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