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In the past, buildings ofien reflected the culture of a society but today all modern buildings look alike and cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar.What do you think is the reason for this, and is it a good thing or a bad thing?

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Nowadays,
buildings
 in the
cities
 are all looked like each other without reflecting the local
culture
 all around the world.Some
people
 argue
that is
 detrimental to the
culture
 of nations.From my perspective,it is beneficial to apply in society.
This
 essay will show the reasons why
this
 phenomenon would trigger and why it is a good thing. Reasons for
this
 phenomenon are diverse,but the main one is urbanization.With the world’s
people
 expanding,more and more
people
 moved to the urban area.
Nevertheless
,the space of the
cities
 is limited,and the
cities
 was becoming more and more crowded.For solving it,
buildings
 in the
cities
 have to be built higher and parallel on account of the better management for governments and standard materials and methods in global architecture.SOn
this
 occasion,
cities
 have a higher density of living and it is easier to plan.As a consequence,the
buildings
 lose their function of reflecting the
culture
.
Also
,more and more alike architectures in the
cities
 are necessary.For one thing,it is helpful to plan the city.
For instance
,it is easier to plan the drain tunnels and electricity of the same concrete mansion,compared with the various national
buildings
,whose size,structures and materials are all different from each other.For another,
people
 can be protected better by applying modern
buildings
.It is generally believed that modern
buildings
 are safer than
the
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former ones.If
people
 suffered havoc,like earthquakes,floods and so on,it would be meaningless to pay more attention to the
culture
 contained in the
buildings
. In conclusion,
although
buildings
 nowadays can not reflect the
culture
 better,it is indispensable for our society and human civilization.
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