Some people prefer activities and lifestyles in hot climates while others prefer living in cold climates. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People
around the world like different
climates
. Some
people
love to live or do activities in hotter
climates
.
In contrast
, there are other
people
, who prefer and enjoy cold
climates
.
This
essay will discuss both points of view On the one hand, many
people
like a hot environment for living or travel for different reasons. Mostly,
this
kind of area has longer days and
people
can do long day activities.
In addition
,
people
from countries
,
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were
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they have less sun exposure during the entire year like to spend time in sunny places and
also
like to get tanned.
Furthermore
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they enjoy
to wear
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summer clothes. Not only
this
but
also
the sky at night are very clear with a lot of stars, many
people
like
this
spectacular view.
For example
, Dubai has a hot climate almost the entire year and many
people
visit from different counties to enjoy the sun and do many different activities during the day.
On the other hand
, some
people
love to live in colder
climates
because it gives a boost to their productivity. For
an
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instant, many
people
can not think or concentrate on work in hot
climates
, while in a coder place they feel comfortable because of less perspiration.
Furthermore
, many
people
are born and brought up in
this
kind of
climates
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and their bodies are adjected to live with it.
For example
, someone who was born in Canada
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a cold country,
it
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will be hard for
them
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to move to Dubai
like
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a hot country. In my opinion, clod
climates
are more comfortable for living and working because it will keep you cool and the air will feel cleaner and less dust. Though, sometimes extreme cold will make living harder. To conclude, different
people
live in different
climates
based on where they currently live and work and what makes them feel more comfortable base on their interests.
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