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Global environmental issues are the responsibility of rich nations not of poorer nations Do you agree with this opinion?

#responsibility #nations
It is said that it is the only responsibility of a developed nation to look after the
environment
 globally. I do not agree with
this
 statement.
This
 essay will discuss my viewpoints in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, it is commonly said that rich countries have numerous resources to take care of the
environment
 globally.
Firstly
, they have scientist which can study
about
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the
environment
 and can give information about the
environment
.
Secondly
, they have enough funds to save
environment
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.
For instance
, Canada has
number
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 of
expertise
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of
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environment
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 who helps the government to save
environment
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.
On the other hand
, poorer
nation
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 do not have sufficient resources
such
 as finances and expertise.
This
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 developing countries focus on the needs of their countries. But, I think that they can preserve
environment
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 by their own responsibility
such
 as by using electric
vehicle
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vehicles
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instead
 of fuels
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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