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Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on products they sell. Others believe that it is the consumer’s responsibility to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Some people believe that producers and supermarkets should use less packaging on their
products
, while others believe that the consumer is the ones that should be avoiding buying
this
 kind of product.
This
 essay believes that the earlier is more responsible for reducing the use of packaging. Manufacturing
companies
 and supermarkets produce the most packaging garbages in the world. As the big players in the industry, these
companies
 can create a bigger impact by making substantial changes in how they produce and distribute their
products
. As the
first
 example, they can avoid
this
 by using more environmentally friendly materials to package their
products
.
Furthermore
, supermarkets can
also
 limit plastic usage by encouraging buyers to bring their own bags. By doing
this
, there will definitely be a more significant impact. Customers,
on the other hand
, have a more limited role in
this
 movement. Their roles are limited to bringing their own reusable bags whilst shopping and avoiding
products
 with plastic packaging. Unfortunately, the consumer can only choose from the options available in the market.
Therefore
, it is believed that the impacts that they are created are a lot lesser. It is seen that
companies
 give more impact,
therefore
this
 essay believes that
companies
 are more responsible.
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