The percentage of overweight children in western countries has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
In the
last
ten years, the number of children
suffer
from Wrong verb form
suffering
obesity
in western countries has risen by almost 20%. Doing less exercise and eating much junk food are the main reasons for that. As a result
, children
’s health deteriorated, causing many health issues, and overweight children
might be
Unnecessary verb
apply
loss
confidence as well.
One of the Replace the word
lose
first
reasons of
the number of Change preposition
apply
obesity
increased so much
quickly is that Correct quantifier usage
apply
children
always sitting and lack of
exercise. Change preposition
apply
For example
, as technology developed, children
are more willing to spent
more time Change the form of the verb
spend
to
sitting before the computer and playing computer games rather than Change preposition
apply
go
outside to have a walk. Another reason that needs to be considered is Wrong verb form
going
children
are the main group of people who consume fatty food. Such
as chips and pizza which is
full of oil. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Consequently
, those unhealthy diet
would cause weight growth rapidly.
Change the determiner
that unhealthy diet
those unhealthy diets
Obesity
would cause many healthy
issues for Replace the word
health
children
. For example
, they might have a high blood level or diabetes at a very young age, so that
they need to pay more attention Correct word choice
apply
about
their playing and Change preposition
to
eating
Behavior. They cannot play Change the capitalization
Eating
everything
as well as Change preposition
with everything
eating
everything, Wrong verb form
eat
this
might causes
some Change the verb form
cause
psychology
problems. Replace the word
psychological
In addition
, some overweight children
might loss
confidence Replace the word
lose
about
themselves. Because of Change preposition
in
obesity
, children
might not like to express themselves freely since they are afraid of judgement comes
from Wrong verb form
coming
other person
, Change the wording
another person
other people
such
as giving a performance before their peers. Thus
, obesity
might cause ill-effect both in
their body Change preposition
on
or
their maid.
In conclusion, lack of exercise and eating much junk food would lead to a bad effect Correct word choice
and
in
Change preposition
on
children
’s body
and Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
mind
. Teachers in the school should always give some Fix the agreement mistake
minds
healthy
education classes and parents should give their Replace the word
health
children
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