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People's shopping habits depend more on age than other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many people opine customer's shopping mood tracker is more related to the range of age ,
however
 ,others argue with and allege there are other factors that have impressed on the manner of shopping ,
such
 as money and
advertisment
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advertisement
 ,so , I am going to explore in these factors to clarify
this
 issue and give my opinion.
Firstly
, young people have a high tendency to buy the latest brands that are more popular in their society ,while ,older adults would prefer products with a suitable level of guarantee ,
for example
, when I was a child ,I and
may
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my
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 father went to the
shoes
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shoe
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 store to choose my desired shoes I heard from my friends the Nike is a famous brand in
this
 regard ,meanwhile , I was explored the
strore
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store
 to find these,while, my father had
adviced
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advised
 me that a great shoe must be fit with my foot and less weight,after
this
 experience, I found youngers have more impressed by the fashion than
olders
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holders
old
,but ,
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advertisement
advertising
 is still very effective on the individual's desire to buy a product .
Second
,
economic
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the economic
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 level of each person is playing a major role
to
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 providing some sorts of goods,
for example
, based on the
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research
researcg
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research
 study that has conducted in
UK
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the UK
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, workers would prefer
buy
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to buy
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 fundamental foods for their families
such
 as bread ,sugar and rice ,while, engineers and teachers have
invest
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 their budget on the supplementations and meat ,
however
, both groups
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 matched in age and sex ,but , their monthly income is a great factor for shopping .
In
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 sum up, according to my
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experience
exprience
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experience
 and rely on the evidence , shopping preference will organize through the mean of
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people's
peopl's
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people's
 income and their previous experience,of course , age is
a
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 effective factor but not the most important
than
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 others.
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