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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The younger crowd all over the world should get better
work
 and life experiences before they start their professional life.
This
 essay will elaborate on the benefits both teenagers and the
community
 get by engaging those in some
community
work
 in their leisure time without a salary.
Firstly
, by engaging in social
work
 youngsters can experiment with the life and academic skills they have learnt throughout their primary and secondary education. So, even without pay if someone involves in
community
work
 in their free time that will eventually help the person to gain a chance of applying the theory to practical situations freely.
Secondly
, the young citizens can expose to well-experienced people in society which allows them to develop their skills and processors.
Furthermore
, they can be pioneers in communication and inter-relationship skills during
this
 involvement. Meanwhile,
this
 allows them to
work
 with people who are from numerous socio-cultural backgrounds and that leads a pathway to
work
 as a group. All these pros create good professionals, industry looking forward to welcoming them in future. Not only teenagers but
also
, the
community
 has benefited from the said free service. Society can get some extra
work
 for free. Though the
work
 is unpaid when these young generations engage as teams, the relevant job is finished in an efficient and responsible manner as they are energetic and enthusiastic. In
this
 sense, the
community
 will obviously generate a bunch of responsible human resources for the world. In conclusion, I hundred per cent agree that the young generation should involve in some
community
work
 in their free time for the benefit of both
community
 and themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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