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Some people believe that having a conversation on a mobile phone in a public or crowded place should be banned. Others feel that we should be able to talk wherever we like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There has been a controversy about whether
people
 should have a
conversation
 on a mobile
phone
 in a public or crowded place. I think there shouldn't be any restrictions;
people
 can talk freely. My reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
,
people
 can stay informed timely. It's expected that there are some reasons why
people
 converse in public
areas
. Take me as an example. I was on the bus yesterday, and there was a lady sitting
next
 to me. I heard she was talking to her friends about her new job; she looked quite excited and left the bus at the
next
 station. At
this
 point, were phones to be banned in public
areas
,
people
 couldn't get vital information on time, and it could cause some losses.
Besides
, having a
conversation
 on a mobile
phone
 in a public place can entertain the tedious journey. As we know, the journey between two destinations can be monotonous;
hence
, talking on the
phone
 is considered a good way to spend your time.
Second
, it's
also
 a manifestation of freedom of speech. It's expected that the core of freedom of speech is to speak whatever and wherever we want.
Therefore
, the right to have a
conversation
 on a mobile
phone
 in public
areas
 manifests the principle of freedom of speech to a large extent.
On the contrary
, if there was a restriction about talking on mobile phones in public
areas
, it would violate
this
 concept substantially.
On the other hand
, talking in a public place has some negative influences as well.
For example
, it annoys other
people
 or passengers. It's commonplace that someone talks about his personal matters on a bus or train quite loud. As a consequence, all others can hear the
conversation
 clearly, which might involve some shameful things. In
this
 case, speakers should at least control their voices to ensure others won't be bothered. In conclusion, I believe we have the right to talk wherever we want, but we need to control our voices.
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