In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

There is a widespread phenomenon that after all the improvements made in agriculture,
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number of individuals globally are without food.
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to
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First
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of
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to work in the sector is one of the enormous
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contributing to famine globally. A lot of youths after graduation want to sit in the offices and work rather than
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be on the farms.
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there is nobody to operate the sophisticated machines and so the few farmers do it to feed their families and not on
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basis.
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of technical
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to use these machines
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for
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. Most of these
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manufactured in
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foreign countries and when imported, some do not come with
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manuals and even those that have it too can not be read and understood because it is written in a different language.
As a result
, it decreases the quantity to be produced causing famine.
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, it was reported that quite a lot of
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brought in from China to help
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the rice plantation farm in
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has been abandoned for the past two years due to the
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of personnel to manage it. In terms of solution, the government should make the agriculture department attractive for the youngsters so that majority will be willing to work there after school to handle the new
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brought in with their knowledge and skills. Again, transporters of farming items should ensure that how to use the things are attached to it and is
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can be used without them. Availability of these incentives and manuals will help increase productivity which will reduce hunger.
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, since it was announced at the national food day celebration that
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entering the agriculture sector would be given a car and accommodation, the workforce has increased as well as local rice production from 5% to 20%. In conclusion, after considering the core reasons and associated solutions, I will
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suggest that the government should motivate the educated young ones to take up farming.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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