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Some people argue that globalization is harming people more, rather than doing good. However, some others argue for the opposite. Do the advantages of globalization outweigh disadvantages?

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In the modern
world
, it is crucial for every country to be connected with each other.
Although
 some believe that
globalization
 could bring more harm to society, others feel, it has significant importance for the
world
 to move forward. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the pros and cons of
globalization
 and my personal opinion on why it has more benefits than drawbacks.
Countries
 connecting to each other have many advantages. International trade helps to support each other,
for example
, Ukraine is the biggest exporter of grain and they export to over 50 continents around the
world
.
Second,
globalization
 helps to share the knowledge and new technology discovered
such
 as how
Isreal
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 managed to convert seawater to freshwater which could be used for farming.
Finally
, it could help
countries
 to support each other when they fall into trouble.
For example
, in 2004 when the tsunami hit Sri Lanka, it took more than 50,000 lives and destroyed more than 20% of the land. Even though it was a devastating situation, many
countries
 donated financial aid to recover the situation.
On the other hand
, it could bring certain disadvantages as well.
Firstly
, people have access to all the bad things happening around the
world
such
 as physical and sexual violence,
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 a result,
this
 could affect
adults'
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 and children's mindsets.
Secondly
, it could create competition among
countries
.
For example
, nowadays, we
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 witness how China and America are competing with each other in order to dominate international trade.
Finally
, it has a devastating impact on the natural environment
such
 as deforestation for farming, sea pollution because of ships and air pollution
due to
 the increase in production factories. In summary, I discuss the benefits of
globalization
as well as
 how it could bring certain drawbacks to society. In my opinion,
globalization
 is a crucial factor and it is almost impossible to survive without
countries
 being connected to each other.
Therefore
 I strongly agree the advantages of
globalization
 outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural exchange
  • international trade
  • economic growth
  • advanced technology
  • innovations
  • standards of living
  • loss of cultural identity
  • dominant global cultures
  • widening gap
  • developed and developing countries
  • environmental degradation
  • industrial activities
  • local ecosystems
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