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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently the world has been developing significantly, so more people are expected to have decent soft skills in their lives.
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, schools create voluntary programs suchlike working for a charity, and helping the surrounding
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 because these
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 can play a crucial in their lives. In my opinion, I agree with
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 statement and I will discuss it below. One of the most beneficial reasons for
students
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 to do these jobs is to gain experience in their lives. By doing these voluntary
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, they can learn how to socialize with other people, learn how to do things that they never do and sharpen their minds.
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, these
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 are not only helping them in personal skills but
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 helping these
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 expand their relationships. With those relationships, they can have teammates or soulmates, who will support them in the future. The
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 but important highlight is that attending in highschool programs can help their career path in the future. They can discover what they love during
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 period and decide if they can
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 for NGOs in the near future. Even though they don’t want to
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 for these organizations, they can put their achievements in their CV, which can help them have a higher opportunity to be employed in companies and corporations.
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,
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 who are highly skilled can easily adapt to their
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 environment, communicate professionally and use their skills to add value to the places where they
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. In my conclusion, there are a lot of advantages for
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 who participate in these activities and I agree that community service is vital for
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. I suggest that schools should organise and fund these unpaid community
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 as well as open soft skill classes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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