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Band 4.5

You read an article in a magazine recently which might be useful for you and your friend's job. Write a letter to your friend and say -Describe an article and its content, explain why it is good for you, why would it be helpful for your friend?

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Dear Anna, How have you been? I hope
this
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 letter finds you in good health and wealth. I am writing
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 to inform you that the importance of short breaks in between long working hours. I have read an
article
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 in a famous magazine called "Vanita health".
Actually
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I
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it
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 was fascinating. The
article
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 is written by
Dr.
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James he is one of the famous neurologists in Ramagiri hospital , in that he said that nowadays most
of
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the
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apply
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people have a
sedementary
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sedimentary
sedentary
 life
especially
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 after covid pandemic we have
a remote
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a remote work model
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work
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 models. Sitting in front of a computer for a long time can cause detrimental effects on our brain eventually deprivation of neutrons may occur,
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 it would develop a condition called dementia. When I read the
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 I
have
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became scared because both we are spending a lot of time
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in front
infront
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in front
 of electronic gadgets for our
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.
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 of lengthy
work
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 he has been
advice
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take
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 a short
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then
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and then
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 relax for 5 minutes. For relaxing he suggests several activities like listening to music ,brisk walking ,meditation so on . I think the
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 is very useful and I Will share a copy along with the letter. Kindly go
through
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itthrough
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. I
am look
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 forward to meeting
from
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you. With love , Krishna.

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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