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Some argues that IT has its negative impact more than positive impact. Discuss both aspects and give your opinion.

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In recent years the IT
industry
 is growing at an accelerated rate. Few
people
 argue that IT has adverse implications when compared to its positive effects.
This
 essay will discuss both views with examples and I will give my opinion. To commence with , it s an undeniable fact that the IT
industry
 is expanding rapidly when compared with any other
industry
. Some
people
 believe that the IT
industry
 is the ultimate threat to humans as it does most of the human work.
For example
,
the
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advancements in technologies like Robotics, Artificial intelligence etc will replace human beings.
As a result
 of
this
 many
people
 will become jobless. The other negative impacts include cyber crimes, online fraud and some other anti-social activities.
For example
, in recent years we have seen
a
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malware called Ransomware has attacked the IT
industry
 and after that
people
have
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lost their faith .
On the other hand
 , the way IT has changed today's world is definitely an important thing to note. It has made the lives of
people
 easier. If we use it correctly
then
 it will be very helpful to mankind. For an instance, the advancements in the IT sector have increased the world GDP highly and
also
 help in doing our tasks accurately. In conclusion, after scrutinizing both the views, I strongly believe that like any other sector IT
industry
also
 has its pros and cons but considering all the good things it has done I can say that the growth in the IT business has more positive impacts than negative impact and it is always beneficial to mankind.
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