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Band 4

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years,
government
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the government
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focus
focuses
focused
focuse
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focused
 on improving
quality
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the quality
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 of life,
that
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which
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 would bring a lot of benefits for citizens
such
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 as communication, transportation,
health
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and health
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 care. Some
argument
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argue
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 that built railways is more useful for local
people
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 than roads. In my opinion, it is a good idea that more
train
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 station is built. There are some reasons.
First
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 of all, it reduced
pollution
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 when more
people
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 give up driving to work
in
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on
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weekday
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weekdays
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.
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Nowadays
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Nowaday
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Nowadays
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,
people
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 spend a lot of time on the
road
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in
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during
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 rush hours. At the same time, emissions of
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car
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cars
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 bring
a
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apply
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pollution
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in
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to
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 our environment.
People
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 easily get upset, if they got into
traffic
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a traffic
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 jam for
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a longtime
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longtime
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long time
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.
Reaserch
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Research
 has shown that it
is get
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is getting
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 more
pollution
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 if ear that
car
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 stopped on the
road
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 without cutting power. Trainstation is a good way to make easy that
train
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 never could get into congestion and
train
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 is a public transport which is more helpful to reduce air
pollution
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.
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, it solved congestion on the
road
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 while many
people
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 commute by
train
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, nearly years, a number
od
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of
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car
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 is growing. So a question that a number of
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the car
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car
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cars
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 is over volumed of
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road
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the road
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 is following.
This
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 caused traffic
jam
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jams
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 have
being
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be
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harrible
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horrible
 problem.
However
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, the
train
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 will take more
people
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 to go to their destinations without waiting on
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road
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the road
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in
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during
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 rush hour. It is kore convience for citizen. 
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, taking public transport is cheaper than privatcal
vichele
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Michele
.
People
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 could save money to do others they
interested
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are interested
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.
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in.
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 Overall, government pay more money for building
railway
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the railway
a railway
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. It
bring
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brings
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 more it is a good decision that advantages than drawbacks.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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