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Foreign visitor should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people argue that international tourists are supposed to pay more than native travellers for visiting historical monuments.I partially agree with
this
 view,as now will be discussed. It is
first
 necessary to acknowledge that there are,indeed,native
residences
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have
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 to pay a
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worthwhile
worthwile
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worthwhile
 expense to preserve national attractions through the tax system.
Therefore
,it is reasonable that
the
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foreigners should pay a higher amount of fee than locals.
In addition
,the more developed
the
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tourism is the more devastated the historical constructions are.
As a result
,the local administration
need
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 to collect the
diffirence
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difference
cost
 from aboard visitors to conserve and renovate the facilities of
tourist’s
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 attractions.
For instance
,the
singapore
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Singapore
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government
goverment
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government
 applied the lower
cost
 for
domestic
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the domestic
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 population for entrance
ticket
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in
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 every
destinations
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.
On the other hand
, foreigners
already
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 prepared for their trip
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budget
buget
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budget
such
 as the
cost
 of travel, accommodation, food and buying souvenirs.
Thus
, exceeding the
cost
 might dissuade them from travelling.
This
 cause a noticeable decrease in tourism and a significant source of income which impacts badly
to
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 the
country
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 economy. One
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explanation
explaination
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explanation
 for
this
 is that
,
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less
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fewer
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 tourists will make
a
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numerous hotels and restaurants to be closed
then
 the unemployment rate rise dramatically.
For example
, foreigners complained that the travelling charge in Vietnam
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way
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 much more than
other
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southern
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asian
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 countries like Thailand,
Cambodia
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 so they decided to travel
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to others
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others
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 countries in the area
instead
so
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Vietnam lost
a
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large profitability in
this
 field in 2016. In conclusion, it would be judicious to make the oversea tourists pay more than natives but it could be an
ineffiency
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inefficiency
 step for the
country
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 benefit if it is inconsequential
controlled
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and controlled
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 by the authorities.
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