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Many manufactured food and drinks products contain high levels of sugar, which casuses many health problmes. Sugar products should be made more expensive to encourge people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or diagree?

#food #drinks #products #levels #sugar #casuses #health #problmes #encourge #people #diagree
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packaged food and drinks
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excess
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 amount of
sugar
 which is harmful
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 health and may cause serious problems.
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 agree
sugar
 beverages should be made more costly to encourage individuals to consume minute
sugar
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 period of time. If the authorities will ban these beverages or increases the price of products lead to less consumption among
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 public
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, in a recent article of
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the Washington
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post
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 there was a column which explain the benefits of reducing the sales of big giants like coke and
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.
As a result
, there will be less intake of manufactured
prodicts
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products
 in general.
Secondly
, these packaged products are addictive in nature
therefore
, their
habbit
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habit
 of drinking is difficult to stop once started regularly. To elaborate
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these drinks generally contain
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 amount of caffeine which is more harmful
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 health resulting in addiction. to
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300 ml of coke contains 30 gm of
sugar
 and 3 gm of caffeine. consequences of the same
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 to obesity and various other health problem which will be identified later in
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life. overall
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government
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 should regulate the prices of these products and
also
 a standard limit should be set to tackle
this
 problem
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufactured food and drinks
  • high levels of sugar
  • health problems
  • sugar products
  • consume less sugar
  • made more expensive
  • discourage consumption
  • contribute to
  • other factors
  • generate revenue
  • low-income individuals
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