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Several individuals select to be self-employed rather than working as a professional. Both of these choices are
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personal preferences of an individual. Both these have some negatives and positives. In my personal ,opinion
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 would choose to be self-employed rather than a working professional. To commence, with, the advantages of self-employed
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 think there is no restriction on life . one can do their work whenever they want and there are minimal restrictions to work according to someone. To elaborate it huge amount of people only choose self-employed so that they can take charge of their future. For ,instance many people don't want to spend much time doing other organisational work.
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 it can be said that time is the one reason people are choosing.
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 are ample opportunities to make money.In other ,words there is no salary system or fixed income source which makes it a high-risk and high-reward type of profession. To ,exemplify many IIT graduates are leaving their escalated salary jobs to switch to the self-employed sector due to the high reward they can get .
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, it can be said that due to the various benefits like availability of time and more scope of earning money letting individuals choose
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