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Many people think that to become a successful specialist it's better to choose a career early in life and never change it later. To what extent do you agree with this view? Support your opinion with relevant examples.

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Some
people
 believe that continuing higher education is important to become successful in
career
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a career
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 path, while others think that the young should start their job early and continue that. In my opinion, working as a specialist provide more opportunities to become successful. Since we are living in a computer age and modern world, most jobs require
people
 who are trained and educated. The number of professions not related to being educated has been decreasing gradually.
For instance
, if you want to work as an employee in a bank, you should know how to work with a computer unlike many years ago.
In addition
, by having academic qualifications or practical qualifications,
people
 have more opportunities to find decent and well-paid jobs.
In other words
, when
people
 are
expert
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experts
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 in their fields, they will be promoted and earn more salaries.
Thus
, they become a successful person in their job.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
 who start their jobs without being trained or graduating from university, and they could achieve their goals like some famous actresses or singers.
For instance
, some talented actresses start playing a role from an early age, and even some of them left school because they could earn a large sum of money. It is true that they are successful in their job, but it is unlikely all
people
 can be successful in
this
 way. To sum up, in my view,
although
 there are some
people
 who choose a profession early in life without attending universities, knowledge and education are necessary for being successful in the career path.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Career longevity
  • Job market dynamics
  • Technological advances
  • Globalization
  • Expertise
  • Adaptability
  • Career advancement
  • Financial stability
  • Job satisfaction
  • Burnout
  • Specialization
  • Fulfilling
  • Personal development
  • Diverse experiences
  • Life events
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