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living in a country where you have to speak foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#country #language
Residing in a foreign nation where you have to speak their local accent can create
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 number of social as well as practical problems. I definitely agree
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 the statement mentioned. Living in a country where
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 have to speak a language other than my mother tongue surely creates
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 for me.
First
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 it is quite hard to understand
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 which creates
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barrier
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therefore
, it would be difficult for me to converse
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 people.
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 will not be able to communicate
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 the native people frequently which in turn bridges the gap.
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 have read an article which shows how badly foreigners are
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treated
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 dialect must be learnt by the foreigner before entering the country.
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jobs related to communication will hamper my earning prospects. To elaborate it
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 must say jargon will
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my day-to-day
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 if
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 want a job in the local industry
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 will not able to meet their requirements
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, for me it would be quite difficult for me to settle in that environment.
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 will feel excluded from the community and will not be able to live
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 fullest . After analyzing the difficulties faced due to the language barrier
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 must say it would be difficult for me to reside without knowing the language
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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