The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The line graphs give information about owning household devices and the period of the house working in a country between 1920 and 2019. The data are presented in percentages and the number of
hours
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the percentages of the number of electrical appliances owned by
families
, had continually
increasing
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,
while
the
hours
of houseworkers obviously diminished. Looking at the first chart, the vacuum cleaner
using
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was 30
percentages
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and forty out of
hundred
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families
owned
the
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washing machines in 1920
which
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the refrigerators were the rare appliances at that time. Just after twenty years, almost half of
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the household
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household
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households
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had three types of electrical divides in their home. After six decades, all
families
owned their washing
machine
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machines
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and vacuum cleaner items
by
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certainly rose from 1920 and remain stable until 2019.
Moreover
, people
who
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bought refrigerators approximately 70% which slowly but sustainably increased in 2019. Moving on to the
second
chart, with the increasing number of electric appliances owned by
families
, their demand for doing household work
for example
, cleaning, washing clothes and preparing meals decreased
with
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50
hours
working a week in 1920.
Finally
, it gradually dropped to only above 10
hours
per week.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, families with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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