You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course.

Dear Mr Yu, Hello, sorry for

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inconvenience. I’m a Business Management Diploma Course student. (BM-105) My name is Rose Ng. Student Number : 190875. I inform you I will quit the course

month.

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I have a full-time job at the moment, recently I got a promoted to be a Sales Manager by my boss, and we are succeeding. Owing to my suddenly raise in the position, I apologise I couldn’t afford plenty of time to study while onwards to the career. On temporary, I will stop my learning for a while. May I ask whether credits can be extended for my diploma? I absolutely understand I will lose my GPA marks, but I’m very interested to continue my study plan in the future when I’m not busy. I would like to organise my Business Management knowledge, that’s could helpful for my job.

Therefore

, I can study again in the

seminar, in the April autumn season.

Also

, I can do the lesson payment, for now,

therefore

I can hold on to the student seat. And thank you for your help. I appreciate your assistance and

forwaiting

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for waiting

waiting

a response from you. Yours Sincerely, Rose Ng

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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