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You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course.

#job #course
Dear Mr Yu, Hello, sorry for
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 inconvenience. I’m a Business Management Diploma Course student. (BM-105) My name is Rose Ng. Student Number : 190875. I inform you I will quit the course
next
 month.
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 I have a full-time job at the moment, recently I got a promoted to be a Sales Manager by my boss, and we are succeeding. Owing to my suddenly raise in the position, I apologise I couldn’t afford plenty of time to study while onwards to the career. On temporary, I will stop my learning for a while. May I ask whether credits can be extended for my diploma? I absolutely understand I will lose my GPA marks, but I’m very interested to continue my study plan in the future when I’m not busy. I would like to organise my Business Management knowledge, that’s could helpful for my job.
Therefore
, I can study again in the
next
 seminar, in the April autumn season.
Also
, I can do the lesson payment, for now,
therefore
 I can hold on to the student seat. And thank you for your help. I appreciate your assistance and
forwaiting
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for waiting
waiting
 a response from you. Yours Sincerely, Rose Ng
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