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The homelessness is a major problem in several countries. What are the major causes and its effects on society?

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It is true that one of the main problems in many countries is
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homelessness. There are many reasons behind the tendency, and several effective steps need to be taken by the government and each individual to tackle them.
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 of all, there are two main causes leading to the tendency. One major cause is that house prices have increased significantly, but the standard salary only has changed a little.
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, the
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 major reason is that the population have increased faster than the development of infrastructure. Fortunately, there are several effective measures to prevent these problems. The
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 solution would be to construct more buildings using tax and community contributions.
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, another solution would be to reduce the fertility rate by law. In conclusion, it is clear that the phenomenon result from many issues
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 and several appropriate steps would be taken by the government and each individual to deal with them.
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