Some people feel that equality between the genders has already been achieved while others feel there is considerable progress to be made. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, evenness for
both
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play a key role in the way people lead their lives. While some people perceive that equality
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both
sex
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has already been reached, others argue that there is significant
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to be done. In
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essay, I will discuss
both
sides of the argument and explain why I feel there is a big improvement but still no equality between the genders. On the one hand, a certain degree of society living in different
countries
and in some
countries
there is absolutely no progress that mostly because of their religion. To illustrate,
woman
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are not allowed to do most
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in Arabic.
Furthermore
,
this
is not just for Arabic that happens
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few more
countries
to and because of that
woman
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and
man
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can not be equal.
Moreover
, people who
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living in other
countries
think there is
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par for
both
gender
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because their
countries
are like that.
On the other hand
, in some
countries
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there is a big growth because they are making changes for
this
situation. To clarify that, used to be there was no women president but nowadays there is a lot of woman presidents.
For example
, Merkel was the president of Germany. Here it can be concluded that, if we plough ahead like that we can achieve
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equality between genders . All in all, what can be concluded from afore-mentioned remarks that individuals advocate, I strongly believe there is a big progress and it will be
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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