In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people. What do you think may be the reasons for this? What problems might this cause in society?

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Today, modernity is progressing and in many developed
nations
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elders are facing issues
such
as lack of respect. There are several causes of
this
problem
and t describe one of them. one the important reasons
this
issue is progressing in technology in
last
decades and young generation due to use of social networking and internet,
thus
they think solution every
problem
and answer every question can find and they don't need elderly's experience or knowledge .
Also
, they think their information is old and not usable for them. Unfortunately,
this
opinion leads to ignoring the elderly and less respect.
this
behavior
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causes
they
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not to care
of
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them and big families change to small families and slowly the foundation of the family will collapse. Indeed,
this
is
worrying
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problem
and surely we can find and uas a kind of ways for solving the
problem
. In my
opinion
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training our children during childhood in our family and in the school that they are respectful and we can use of their experiences and they are a part of our family history and they carry many traditions of our ancestors. In conclusion, one of the main causes of insufficient respect elderly is the development of technology that, produce
problem
in some societies, and lead to destroying the foundation of the family and
forms
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small family without any
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between each other and so, all parents should teach their kids morality and good
behavior
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to grandfather or grandmother.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social structures
  • nuclear families
  • extended family
  • intergenerational respect
  • dual-income households
  • technological advancements
  • perception
  • value shifts
  • vigor
  • innovation
  • increased mobility
  • neglected
  • mental health
  • generational divide
  • misunderstandings
  • stereotypes
  • social fabric
  • healthcare strain
  • inadequate care
  • quality of life
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