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Many countries thought children have to do homework in their free time while others say children should do more outdoor activity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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growing world children are exposed to tremendous pressure and competition in their academics due to which they need to study rigorously and have very less leisure time for outdoor activities. In some ,countries the school itself conducts many outdoor games during school hours and asks students to do homework in their free time as outdoor activities involve physical games which are good for health . Games like Kho - Kho , baseball, badminton, etc require physical strength which keeps children active and healthy. Some schools give more focus on
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 extracurricular activities and studying in their free time . Whereas in other countries school emphasises more on child's academics than its physical fitness and expect
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