More and more young people from wealthy countries are spending time in communities in poorer countries doing unpaid work such as teaching or building houses. Why is this? Who benefits more from this, the communities or these young people?

In recent years, helping to pauper lands for teaching or constructing houses with groups is very popular in young societies .
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Firstly
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poor countries is make
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they want to look like they going to help but their not .Due to that, they just steal a lot of priceless stones in Africa.
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some companies can detect that groups they can not do anything bad
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after which, there will be
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, young
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young
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told everyone in
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, I want to do that because if I will do that at
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young age it will not change when I became
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, some young ages do not want to do that thing because they think it is a waste of time. In light of
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there is a solution and
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we need to teach them helping is the most valued thing in the world. All in all, taking the
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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