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The noise levels have impacted the quality of our life, what are the causes of this problem and what should be done to solve it. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Noise
 pollution is unavoidable in today’s
society
. Due to
high
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 level of tone, it is badly affecting the quality of human life. There
are
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 numerous
reason
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reasons
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 behind it, namely infrastructure development and
increase
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 in
high
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a high
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 volume of automobiles.
However
, it must be controlled by the
government
 laws and initiative measures by the people in
society
.
First
 of all, the primary cause for
gradual
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 increase in
the
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noise
 is due to
the
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infrastructure development as well as continuous enhancement. In
community
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the community
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, there are many
construction
 projects
are
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in-progress
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in progress
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 to construct
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the marvelous
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marvelous
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building
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buildings
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 and the machinery used during the
construction
 work makes
a
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loud
noise
 due to the gigantic size and the type of fuel used in it. Due to the short delivery timeframe,
machine
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run
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 for full days. The
government
 should create
a
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rigid
protocol’s
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 to control it. The
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lawmaker
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law maker
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lawmaker
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 must consider
environment
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 and
peoples
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people
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 around the
construction
 area before approving the projects. It should
also
state’s
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state
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a
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the
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 working time and types of
construction
 machinery to use during the period of
construction
. The
government
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 strict law will help the sound produced by real estate
construction
 to reduce it.
In addition
, people in
society
 must have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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 to decrease the level of
noise
 by reducing the frequency of driving using
high
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a high
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horse power
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engine
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engines
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. In recent days, individuals in the
community
 using
the
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two-wheelers
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two wheelers
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, four wheelers very often and modifying the standard engine pattern for creating a loud
noise
.
This
 change makes
high
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a high
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 volume of
noise
,
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 when they pass by. As
a
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responsible
person
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people
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of
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the
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society
, people must follow
an
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 own preventive
measure
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measures
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 to make the
community
noise free
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noise-free
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 by not involving the vehicle in
such
 modifications. The
government
 cannot able to make
a new measures
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new measures
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 for all the issues in
the
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society
. Each and every person must have a responsibility for creating
noise
 free
community
.
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