In many places new homes are needed,but the only available space for building in the countryside.But some people believe that it is more important to protect countryside and not build a new home there.What is your opinion about this,give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own experience or knowledge.

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only properly
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is in the
countryside
. But some people believe that it is more
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significant
to preserve the
countryside
and not build a new home there. There are many estates in the
countryside
, but we must preserve them for future generations. And foremost, we must safeguard our
countryside
. There are numerous animals and habitats in our country. We cannot  ruin their lives and  habitats. Do we have pity on animals
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I them. We should achieve a natural balance. If we built new houses in the
countryside
, it would ruin the natural balance. 
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, it has an impact on our health conditions,
such
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illness
Secondly
, we can use the
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as a relaxing place. There are lots of
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and various  animals.  if we build 
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. ıf my father build  a new
house
ı
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anymore.
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countryside
 
are
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. if  we ruin them   
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are
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unprecentable
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cause of  nature  beauty.
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are much more
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  and vitally  than 
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house
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because
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drawback
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to 
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running
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countryside
and  building  a new
house
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such
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amount of oxygen and 
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possibility
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of disaster. They
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buying
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buy
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