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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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I disagree with the statement that young
people
 have no say in important
decisions
, mainly because there are in fact many ways young
people
 today can
influence
 the
decisions
 that determine the future of
society
 as a whole: they can arrange massive protests for a cause, they can make petitions which can have a big
impact
 on
society
 and they might even
influence
 their
parents
 voting decissions. The
first
 major
way
 young
people
 can
impact
 the future of a
society
, is arranging massive protests. If there are enough young
people
 who believe in an idea, they will be able to stage successful protests that will have an
impact
 on an important decision.
For example
: French students are known for holding very influential demonstrations which changed the
way
 they were treated and
this
 had both an economical and a moral
impact
 on the entire
society
 of France. Another great
way
 young
people
 can make an
impact
, is by getting
people
 to sign petitions. If enough
people
 sign a petition, the government will not be able to ignore it and will have to comply with it’s terms. A friend of mine believes strongly that genetically modified foods should not be allowed to be imported into Serbia. Because of
this
, he actually brought a petition to a birthday party which demanded banning the importation of
such
 foodstuffs in Serbia and all of the
people
 present there signed it.
On the other hand
, a young
person
 could
influence
 important
decisions
 through the votes of his
parents
, if he were still not old enough to vote. If he felt strongly enough about a certain decision, he would get informed about the various aspects of the situation surronding that decission. With
this
 knowledge, he might be able to convince his
parents
 into voting the
way
 he would vote for
such
 a decision. When it was time to choose a new president for our country, I was still not old enough to vote, but I really cared about
this
 issue. So I really got informed about the whole situation and managed to convince my
parents
 into voting for the
person
 that I thought was best suited for the job of being the president of Serbia. As we look back on the various ways in which a young
person
 can
influence
 important
decisions
 that
impact
 the future of
society
 as a whole, we see that there are in fact many ways a young
person
 can contribute. It is because of
this
 that I believe young
people
 should be encouraged to take whatever part they can in order to
influence
 these major
decisions
.
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