In the future, it is difficult for humans to live on earth. Some people think more money should be used to on the researches on how people can live on other planets, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The difficulty of the survival of humanity on
earth
generates the debate of whether we should be more financially supportive
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studies of other planets for humans to migrate to by its enormous impact on the fate of our species. There are supporters and
skeptics
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, and I am one of the former. Admittedly, the
people
disagreeing with the thought have their ground when there are other problems with more urgency.
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, it is not unusual
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see
people
suffering from wars, famine and lack of access to shelters and clean water, as well as regions facing inadequate infrastructures,
such
as poor hospitals and schools, whose development requires
money
, too.
However
, the importance of
this
practice is much heavier. Without the
researches
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, we cannot reverse the trend of global warming, stop the destruction of
earth
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, or find
the
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alternative planet to live on.
As a result
, we can’t even live in poverty, we may extinct. The initial concerns should be protecting the
earth
while planet migration is the
last
option in the worst situation. Studies
of
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renewable energy
is
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the
first
one to be carried out, attributed to its low risks and long-term influence of developing the new technology. The alternative solution
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could beIn the future, it is difficult for humans to live on
earth
. Some
people
think more
money
should be used
to
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on
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the
researches
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on
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how
people
can live on other planets,
such
as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree? studied is burying carbon dioxide underground, but
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to the
last
one,
this
theory has not been put into
actions
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yet, leading to its unpredictability, and the requirement large amount of land and
money
makes the practice
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for less than millenniums. The
last
research about other planets like mars which may be suitable for us to survive is
also
expensive but necessary. It is not hard to tell that it is probably the
last
hope of humans, the species of ours, to keep our existence.
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conclude my words, in spite of other needs
of
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money
,
researches
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should be considered
first
for its unparalleled importance
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humanity.
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