Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones, online games, and social networking Website. Do you agree or disagree?

With the development of today's technology, electronic
devices
have entered the house of each person, which has made people's life much easier than before.
Children
have
also
been massively exposed to these new forms of technology.
However
, at the same
time
, some
parents
started to complain that it is harder now to educate their
children
than it was before
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because their
children
would always be playing with their cell phones or other electronic
devices
. From a personal experience, I think it indeed has become harder for
parents
to educate their
children
now. My reasons are provided below.
First
, the occurrence of electronic
devices
has made less
time
for
parents
to communicate with their
children
. Educating
children
has become harder due to distractions from electronic
devices
. Now,
children
spend more
time
on cell phones than they could spend with their
parents
,
therefore
, there
are
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less
time
for
parents
to talk with their
children
.
For example
, my cousin has a laptop that he bought while he was in school, whenever he was at home, he would spend most of his
time
on his laptop and barely talk to his
parents
. Only in times of eating food or family
meetings
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he would have
time
to speak with other family members. His
parents
sometimes want to talk to him about his future career path,
however
, he would have no
time
because he was busy
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talking to people
from
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the internet!
Second
, the gaps between
children
and their
parents
have been widened with the occurrence of electronic
devices
. Now, there are so many new things or concepts being invented and spread through the internet.
Children
may have changed because of these new concepts.
However
,
Parents
may not know these things that have changed their
children
's thinking, so they would find it has become harder to understand their
children
, not to mention to educate their
children
. Take an example of myself, sometimes I would encounter
this
situation with my
parents
as well. As a young person, I always use cell phones to learn the latest news or catch the latest trends in fashion. My
parents
sometimes would comment on the style of my dressings, and
then
we would have arguments about my outfit. The reason was they think I dressed too exposed and the
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was too odd. But, it was just the latest trend of the
time
, I was just following the trend! The gap between me and my
parents
has made it hard sometimes for my
parents
to understand me. In conclusion, based on the examples mentioned above, I think it is indeed more difficult for
parents
to educate their
children
today than it was before because of generation gaps and less
time
from their
children
that could be used to conduct quality communications.
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