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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teacher will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

#technology #fullness #time #classroom #teacher
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In
this
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 present world, the usage of
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 is constantly on the rise. Even classrooms are among the many places that enjoy the usage and benefits of
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. It
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 that
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classroom teachers
 will be
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totally
 substituted for
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. Analysing the incapability of disciplining
classroom
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students
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 with
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 the limitation in the learning process of
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 taught with
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 will prove
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.
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, a robotic teacher made with artificial intelligence would lack
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sufficient control over its
classroom
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students
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.
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, it
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 that kids need to be thoroughly watched by their
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 to be sure that they take their classwork seriously and do not
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fool around when classes are going on. Sadly,
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this is
 a task of robotic
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 will be incapable of carrying out.
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,
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 makes it clear that
classroom
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teachers
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 will never be totally substituted for
technology
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.
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, the learning process of
students
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 would be disrupted if they are taught by robotic
teachers
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, which may slow down some
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' ability to
comprehed
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comprehend
 information taught in lessons.
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, kids love to be motivated before lessons are taught effectively.
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 is a quality that many human
teachers
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 have but robotic
teachers
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 do not have.
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 it becomes apparent that human
teachers
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 will never be replaced with robotic
teachers
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 in a
classroom
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. To summarise, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to
students
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 and actually works to retard the ability of a
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students
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 to comprehend new lessons.
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,
it is clear that
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 the idea of running a
classroom
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 completely by a machine cannot be supported. After
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 analysis on
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 subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over
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-driven
teching
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teaching
 will always be greater than the
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positive
 effects, and because of
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,
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teachers
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 will never be substituted for
technology
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task achievement
Ensure that you address all parts of the task clearly. Although you have touched upon why teachers cannot be replaced by technology, you could enhance your argument by providing a more balanced discussion, considering possible counter-arguments before refuting them.
coherence cohesion
Strive for a more cohesive argument by using a variety of connecting words and ensuring that each paragraph naturally follows from the one before. Avoid repetition and aim for a clearer progression of ideas.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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